Saturday, 31 March 2012

Amy's Final Fan Fiction

[Until the rose is wilted.......]  based on Snow-white and seven dwarfs.


Once upon a time, there was a castle in a wild place. A king and queen lived there; they loved each other dearly, and were happy.
One day the queen sat down the window. It was winter outside, and very cold, and presently it began to snow. She opened the window and wished in her heart.
“Oh! God. I’m telling my dream tonight. I want a child as white as snow.”

And her wish came true, for in the course of time she had a daughter. She was called Snow-white, for her skin was white as snow; also her lips were red as rose, and her hair  asb lack as night.

But, the queen died when she was born.

After a year, the king married again. His new bride was a beautiful lady. Nobody told him that she had a proud heart and greedy; jealous temper. Nobody mentioned that.

The queen had a magic mirror, which hung on her bedroom wall.
Sometimes, she whispered into the glass, sweetly, pleasantly,
“Mirror, mirror on the wall, who is the loveliest one of all?”
And mirror as magical voice always answered,
“You are the loveliest.”
Then the proud queen was satisfied.

But Snow-white was growing prettier and prettier.

One day, when the queen looked in the mirror and asked as usual,
“Mirror, mirror on the wall, who is the loveliest one of all?”
The mirror answered,
“Queen, you are lovely, and Snow-white is also lovely!”
From that moment she hated Snow-white with all her heart.

The angry queen made Snow-white to do house work every day.
Snow-white had to do a lot of house works that the queen ordered every day. But she had grown up prettier than before even she worked very hard.

Next day, the king found out the truth that his lovely daughter had been house working while he was with busy days. He became angry; it was a first time he mad at queen.
She was so depressed, so she asked her magic mirror again.
“Mirror, mirror on the wall, who is the loveliest one of all?”
And the mirror answered,
“Snow-white is loveliest of all.”
Then the queen was horribly shocked. Her beautiful face turned into yellow with envy and rage.
She failed to repress her fulminating anger and threw the mirror, and it was smashed into pieces.

Snow-white missed her mother, so she went to the forest for a walk. It was already evening, and one star shone in the patch of sky above the trees. There in front of her stood a little house, with a neat garden all round.

She knocked on the door. Nobody answered…..….still nobody…. ……She turned the handle and walked in.
Inside, a table was laid with seven little knives and forks, seven little plates, seven little glasses of wine and a rose in a vase. Around the table were seven little chairs and along one wall were seven little beds. She looked at the rose,
“Oh, what a pretty rose here~”
At that time, seven dwarfs came into their home and firstly they saw the Snow-white is trying to touch the rose. And a youngest little dwarf Frank shouted,
“No! Don’t touch that rose! Who are you?”
“I’m sorry. My name is Snow-white. My stepmother hates me…..I missed my mom, so I came to this forest for a walk…..and just found your house”
“Oh, that’s so sad... Snow-white, if you will keep house for us, you may stay with us and we will look after you always.”
Snow-white didn’t want to go back to castle, so she just accepted dwarf’s offer. And they became one family.

At that time, in the castle, the king thought Snow-white is disappeared, so he sent all his soldiers into the forest to look for Snow-white, but she was nowhere to be found. So everyone went into mourning for her, and many bitter tears were shed.

Frank fallen in love since he lived with Snow-white. He really liked her white skin and her clear eyes. He didn’t want to lose her, so he said,
“When we go to work, keep the door locked, and don’t buy anything from anyone.”

One day, while the seven dwarfs went work, an old lady came and knocked the door, and said,
“Ripe apples for sale!”
Snow-white opened the window.
“I’m sorry, I don’t like an apple.”
The old lady picked up the biggest apple and she cut it in half and ate the green half. Then, she held out the poisoned rosy-red half and said,
“Have a piece of my sweet, this is free for you. Juicy apple!”
She seemed kind, so Snow-white reached out and took it. But, when she bit into the apple, she fell down as if she were dead.

The seven dwarfs came home and found Snow-white lying on the floor. They tried to wake her, but they could not. So Frank kissed on her lips, and said
“I love you……. please wake up..... I need you....”
And finally the last petal of the rose dropped.

Then, surprisingly the seven dwarfs returned back to princes and the pieces of poisoned apple fell out of Princess Snow-white, and finally she opened her eyes.
How happy they all were! Frank asked Snow-white to marry him, and she said,
“Yes.”

When Frank took her to his father’s castle, everyone began to get ready for the wedding.
Snow-white was a real loveliest bride never ever seen before.
Frank and Snow-white, and six princes, all lived happily ever after.


-The End-

6 comments:

  1. Hey Amy,

    I liked the fairytale genre of your story and thought it flowed really well, you created it with an interesting twist at the end which I really liked. The structure of your sentences sometimes didn't make sense such as 'the king thought Snow-white is disappeared'. I think that the way you presented it was very lovely and overall I think it was very sweet :)

    I hope this was helpful.

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    1. Thank you Monique!
      If i write "The king was looking for Snow-white all day, but he couldn't", like this way, do you think is it better than that?

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  2. Hello!
    Your fan fiction is really sweet!
    I was waiting for your final to be posted lol
    I like your fan fiction more than the original! lol
    it was interesting to read and I couldn't stop!

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  3. Really? thank you Chloe~
    i'm feeling better now ^ ^

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  4. hey amy!

    I liked how you made it so the king stood up for Snow White and the step mother didn't get her way.
    I think you could have mentioned Frank in the story more earlier on in the story, but I enjoyed reading your fan fic! Well done :)
    Thanks for the comment btw!

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  5. yes,i think so if i mentioned Frank earlier.....
    Thank you for your comment it and it was very helpful and thank you for enjoying my stories!

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